Gentle Pool
Gentle rain
washes me clean
as tears slip from
my eyes to pool
at my feet.
washes me clean
as tears slip from
my eyes to pool
at my feet.
posted by Vickie at 9:50 PM
I'm Vickie and I live in Ohio. This is my poetry from this year. If you would like to critique something I've written or simply leave a comment, all are welcome.
posted by Vickie at 9:50 PM
10 Comments:
some really beautiful lines there Vickie!...
keep up the good work,
-Rahi
Ah, the Modicum comes naturally to you lol. I am still piddling with a couple.
I dig. But on the same lines as mentioned regarding “Forever Delightful:”
If you place a comma after clean and come up with a variation of the third line to connect, I think you’ll serve this piece very well.
Thank you all. James, I did something a bit different. See what you think.
"Lights out! Uh hu! Dance, Dance, Dance!"
In other words, I would say this is a fine example of a Modicum.
~ James
Thank you, my good sir. Do you rumba?
I do much more than that. It's quite a site.
You owe me one...but I really don't do much dancing...lol
How about chess?
I haven't played in years...
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