Sand
The beach calls to me
with sparkling white sand
that infiltrates my body
in too-intimate ways
like a new lover eager
to explore every pulse point
that I didn't know existed--
until you.
The water is so clear
and so blue it reminds
me of your penetrating eyes.
You saw me and through me--
made me feel undressed
even when I wasn't.
I was never that sexy
until you.
with sparkling white sand
that infiltrates my body
in too-intimate ways
like a new lover eager
to explore every pulse point
that I didn't know existed--
until you.
The water is so clear
and so blue it reminds
me of your penetrating eyes.
You saw me and through me--
made me feel undressed
even when I wasn't.
I was never that sexy
until you.
posted by Vickie at 12:54 PM
5 Comments:
Ooh, I like this. Only a couple minor suggestions - beach followed by bleached made me stumble a bit. Also, I think infiltrate should be infiltrates. I wouldn't capitalize Until the first time but not the second, just for the sake of continuity. "Made me feel undressed/even when I wasn't." That's killer! :o)
I agree with the capitalization and infiltrates. Does bright-white make you stumble as badly?
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Vickie, I like this. Oddly enough, I wrote on called Sand yesterday. It has nothing in common with this one but the name. :)
Nan
Thanks, Nan. Needless to say, your list was quite inspiring.
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