Ash
rise slowly from ash
flames burn from within
dreams promise passion in turn
wistfulness upon waking
pierce my loneliness
with your fiery lust
flames burn from within
dreams promise passion in turn
wistfulness upon waking
pierce my loneliness
with your fiery lust
posted by Vickie at 9:46 PM
7 Comments:
I so want to read "awaking" as "waking," for the alliteration, but then I realized it's a Vicku and that would leave it short a syllable. In any case, I like this. It's warm, more electric and passionate than what I usually read from you. I hope that isn't an insult - it's not meant to be. :o)
Yes, it is a Vicku. Thanks for catching that. And, I am absolutely NOT insulted. I think that is quite a compliment. I wonder if you missed some earlier ones of mine...lol
Consider this to be an offshoot of the ones circulating at MTC...
ooh la la V!
I am ashamed that I didn't realize it was a Vicku, and was planning on suggesting "waking"
*hangs head in shame*
Since both of you wanted to change awaking, maybe between the three of us we can come up with something that still satisfies the syllable requirement.
how's that?
well hell, good job!
Awesome, V! I think that alliteration works really well there. Glad you found a way to make it work. :o)
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